Lily offered a critique of my last query, and even though I’m happy with it, I decided to play with it and came up with something totally different. This was for fun, but I sent it to Query Shark (Janet Reid), also for fun.

Sounds more like how Sam would write the query. πŸ™‚

Dear Ms. Reid,

Samantha Sanders thought being dragged half-way across the world-okay, from California to Oklahoma-was bad enough, but to find out she dreams of murders that actually happen… things just got worse.

Living with a blind Cherokee grandfather isn’t her dream situation, until she meets Officer Andrew. Β Twenty-one, mucho hot in uniform, and a friend of dear ol’ grandpa’s. Then there’s problem number two: Sam’s too young for him. At least for a few months until she turns that magical number eighteen.

Problem three’s pretty cute too. And great at math.

Problem four. That’s a-whole-nother ballgame. The nightmares went from freakish dreams where she lives the life of a monster who eats fresh human livers, and she somehow finds herself attracted to the creature, to real life. Yeah, real life. They exist. And one of them can enter her dreams.

Loosely based on the Cherokee Legend The Stone Shield, this young adult urban fantasy LEGEND OF THE PROTECTORS is complete at 90,000 words.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

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